writers: i need help

[ashlee]

so ive been trying to write my daydream as a book. I keep starting and i get really into it- then i get embarrassed and dont look at it for months, then i start again. My writers craft teacher made us listen to him talk the whole class about how he got a book published and what he went through and it kind of got me motivated to start writing it again. I always thought maybe one dy it could be published if i actually finished it and it turned out well but it looks a lot harder then it looks LOL (it took my teacher 15 years to get his published :/) 

ANYWAY i want someone to proof read chapter 1 (someones whos good with grammar and writing and stuff.......)
and critique it for me (be mean if you must). I admit its not the best right now, Im really confused with writing this out

ok thank you

[ashlee]

Hehe ok ill send you it tommorow. Oh and one of my characters and your character have the same birthdate yayayay

[ashlee]

i am trying, i havent written much since i wrote this post. yeah its really hard to make it perfect and make it as entertaining as it is in my head typed out. im afraid its ging to be boring because its not the same as just watching it.....

[Jennifer Roxanne Peverell]

I'm not good with grammar and stuff, but i'm here to say that you that you should keep writing. I know that it's hard, believe me, i'm trying to write my daydream and in three years I only got till chapter three (and other random chapters). What makes it hard it's the perfetionist, it has to be perfect, just like in the daydream. So try to not be hard on yourself and just keep writing and writing it doesn't matter if isn't good enough, just write. Later on you will be able to edit it. So i didn't helped at all, but that's it. I hope that I can read your story someday (:

[Rachel]

I could do that. I've been writing stories all my life and I'm kind of a grammar nazi.