MD-poem Negative version

[Jenna]

Okay so I wrote another poem this is the negative version. I'm sorry if this poem offends you. It shouldn't, but if it does I'm sorry. I will try to have a positive version up tomorrow about MD.

The devil awaits with a red-bloody chain.

He whispers my name to tempt me closer and closer.

I find myself trying to run, but I just get farther away from everyone else.

His breath is cold like the winter breeze.

It sends a tingling chill across my spine,

and my heart is beating out of control.

I keep trying to run,

but his malicious grin keeps pulling me in.

Closer, Closer I heard the demons whisper from behind the bushes.

He grabs my hand and drags me to his side

And wraps the chain around my neck.

So I can never escape that world.

It is kinda of weird. I'm not sure where this idea came from, but I just wrote it down. Feedback is appreciated.  Hope you like it.

[Jenna]

Thank you.

[Pascale]

@ Jenna. Very nice poem, dark but nice. And if your poem offend anyone there is a problem with the person offended. Not with you expressing your feelings. Not a feeling easy to express, not a feeling easy to share, but you did it nicely. Keep writing.

@Emilia. Never trust anybody to express what is in your heart. Why not trying to write the moth history. The worse thing that can happen is that you write bad poetry but who care. I think your idea is very good.